I appreciated all the comments I got from Joy. I liked how the first comment I got to see was her overall impression of the essay, she explained my strengths as well as my weaknesses which gave me a general direction to how the edits were going to go. Additionally, her method of editing is very comprehensive in that in addition to making comments on structure she added in suggestions for grammar and sentence fluidity. When Joy comments on a section that needs revision, she doesn’t just tell you what is wrong but also provides suggested ways for improvement. She leverages her knowledge about what Admissions Officers are looking for to specifically pinpoint the areas of improvement—something that wouldn’t be nearly as credible without her expertise as an AO previously. Her review gave me some well founded advice about my personal statement and I’m truly grateful!
I asked Joy last minute to help me with a personal statement and Joy responded right away agreeing to help me. The comments/edits were extremely helpful...Joy also pointed out areas that were out of place and once I rearranged things based on the comments, everything flowed much better. Overall, Joy’s comments/edits were a tremendous help to my personal statement.